Hello,
I really enjoyed this poem!
It was a good poem and I enjoyed reading it, it was cute!
Well done your vocab was really good and it was sorta a little story!
The dream at the end turned it into a sad love poem which is good it shows diffrent emotions in the poem.
Well done on writing a poem, so close after your last ;)

x)

Aww i loved it...very nice flow and story-line, that brings back a lot of memories...ah i wish i was back in first grade again. great job 5/5

sara

Great flow and a very clear story. The end seems a little abruct, but appart from that an excelent poem

Well written, beautiful, and omg omg, no writer's block!!!
That's the good spirit!!

x

Aww thats so adorable. Its kind of sad though... But great poem

That's an awesome poem. It sounds like something out of a book. Girls love romantic poems, keep it up dude.

VERY Cute!!!!! It was really just like a story. I really enjoyed it. wow.... Its so hard to believe your that young... Keep your head up high!!!!
~Jessica~
*aka* Thug Baby

Well, I'm not sure that it would have been a wonderful dream, but then again, I'm not a seven year old boy being treated like a toy while in love.

"She got up off from the ground," didn't seem to flow very well, it kind of stunted the poem, or cut it short, but anyway, the rest had a kind of rhythm to it, a certain constance in the words that made up for anything.
"The little boy saw her in a gleam" kind of didn't make that much sense, unless you're particularly thinking that it was a gleam of sunshine, and then with the ending, where it's all a dream, was rather unexpected.
I got sort of caught up in the story, so I forgot the title, and when it finally came in at the end, it was all quite nice.

So, to sum it up, the story had its good points, if a little weird, and in some ways it sounded quite a bit little a child's love, a little boys dream.

"They knew they're love was true" isn't quite right, it should be "their" love.
Okay, besides that, I found no other mistakes in your poem.

Good Writing!
beth

Very good poem 5/5

This is so cute and i loved how it ended! it was so original i didn't expect it to all be a dream... even tho the title is 'a wonderful dream' haha but i reallly liked it... 5/5
xo adge

I liked this poem alot!! =) 5/5