by Malene Nov 24, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Before, i could take the control over my live. Now i cant. |
It's a good poem with a good message, but it is written a little awkwardly meaning it needs a better flow. You have great ideas, so I would suggest you go and read some of the poems on this site to get an idea of the flow of poetry, still a very good effort in your poem! |