If

by Bernadette   Nov 26, 2005


So you are leaving,
You are breaking my heart,
You say it will be better,
If we are apart.

If I give you part of my heart,
Will you stay?
If that is a yes,
I will give it all away.

If I give my time,
Will you learn to care?
If that is a yes,
Then baby I will always be there.

If I gave you my trust,
Would I be yours to take?
If that is a yes,
My promise I would never break.

And if I promise to never cheat,
Would you believe me?
If that is a yes,
Then baby I am sorry for what you had to see.

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  • 19 years ago

    by The Poetic Child

    Nice Repition, in if thats a yes? well written, nice plot in the poem i like the point of view in that, very good, if i had to say one thing to work one it would be just like i told another person, try using a bigger vocab, to capture the readers mind quickly and make them want to keep writing and then if its really good they'll vote and comment and you'll get ppl adding u on the fav. list, i have the same problem to though, ill give u advice and on what i do, www.rhymer.com you type a word in and they give u a list of all the ryhmes of that word i use that, to use a bigger vocab. im sure it will help u too. ttyl sometimes

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