by Megadrive
That was really beautiful! And so powerful! Lots of emotion there! My advice would be to organize the poem a bit more, here is an example: |
by Goth
I really felt your pain in this poem, |
by Samantha
You def made me tear up... very nice... def 5/5!!!!! |
by kiesha
That is so sad. I'm sorry this happened to you. It must be really tough. I just know that everything happens for a reason, even if we don't understand it or see the good in it at the time. I hope things get better for you. Keep writing and take care. |
by Truest Lies
The words caught the sad story behind this poem so well, it was as though they weren't words, but tears, not perfect, but falling into their wordless place. |
This one is even better than the other one you wrote. I love it. Again, very sad, but excellent. 5/5 again. |
God loves you, even when you can't feel him carry you on his shoulders. |