I like this keep up the good work. it makes me want to be able to hope for something like it.

I love this one i wish i could right of love an stuff like that its beautiful

Very good..can tell u seem to be....in love with some lucky girl lol..take care and keep it up

Omg ur a really good writer mines shit compared to urs but maybe ill get better as i go wow i am very impressed i wonder who the lucky women is u wrote this about or for or w/e but ur like really good!!! keep it up mann

WOW!!!!!!!!!!! this one is AWESOME.... it gave me chills...... i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Love it...your an awsum writer...cant wait to read more

Wow!!!! it is well good. really good. keepy up all the good work!!! :)

This is a wonderful write. Every word had was written with emotion. I especially love the last stanza. It closes the poem beautifully.

I do think that you can improve the structure a bit. The stanza's, although powerful, are a bit cluttered.

Nonetheless. I loved it. Made me appreciate the one I love.
Thank you for your inspirational poem.
David

Amazing... truly amazing. i love your work :)

12 years have passed......

But the dusk soon changes to darkness and the sun to a moon. But we still sit and stare here with our bodies more in twine, whispering sweet everythings. "You are mine".
^^
That whole stanza was amazing thanks for the beautiful read