This is a great poem. I have just one thing to ask (and tell). I noticed in the poem you said she. So was this poem not based on something that happened to you? Or were you just referring to yourself as she? Because if you were just writing something that didn't happen to you, then i suggest you change that and you write something that you have more expierience with. That way you will have more inspiration and you will turn your great poem into an exellent poem.

You have the mind girl...as well as the heart...if you get what I mean...to write such wonderful poems...well...this turns out awesome...5/5

5/5 wicked poem mate keep it up..you are real good with poems..i just wish i could write like dat :(.
newyz keep up the great work!:)
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plz coment mine too!
thankz m8!

Nice one :D i love it .. full of emotions , nice story , and good use of language .... keep it up !!! 5/5

Best poem I read today. That was really something and you spoke of a subject so touching and awwwhhhh it was awesome.