Fire From Within

by Spirit   Nov 29, 2005


When ever you explode with rage
Or keep quite when you learn
It happens to us all no matter what age
That fire inside us will burn

You can try and try
To hold it in
But when you start to cry
The fire bursts out from within

A fire, Grand fire
Burns with a blaze
It's This uncontrollable Desire
That sets you in a haze

That grand fire that started out so small
Is that terribly wonderful fire, which burns inside us all

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  • 17 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    When ever
    Whenever

    Isn't it quiEt?

    This should be lowercased since it's not the first word. Unless you have specific reason of course for capitalizing it.

    I thought it was a cool poem. I like that you confront that all ages have this anger that can build up. Very true and real. 4.

  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Or keep quite = or keep quiet

    out from within= emit the word "out" and just say "from within"

    Obviously a newbie poem, and honestly, it's better than I expected of a first poem.

    But, I urge you to add punctuation, which is a very important part to poetry.

    Other than that, this wasn't the best poem that I've read, it was just okay. The concept of this "great" fire needs a larger, more massive description. You want to entrance the reader, not just... Tell the reader, I s'pose.

    Other than that, there isn't much I can think to say, other than good job.

    5/5
    ~Stephen White

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