Awsum poem,i luv it..5/5,thnx for ur rate/comment,so i returned the favor

Wonderful poem, absolutely brilliant imagery!!! i loved the rhyme scheme, and the tempo kept the poem really up beat. i love the stanza:

I gaze at the sun
The tint of the sky
The vain rainbow trout
Attempting to fly

it adds humour, and stops the poem becoming too dark and depressing. a really fab poem. kee writing, you definately have talent.

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Thanks =)

I'm in the process of readin some of your poems now but I throughly enjoy them. Thanks for the comment too, finally someone who can give constructive critism!!! This poem was excellent I muchly loved the rhythm. You're one of the better writers I've found on here so far :)

I love the imagery created especially in the begining which was rock solid.