Great poem. Quite long and it kept my interest throughout the whole poem. Keep it up

Chantelle

OMG!!! I really liked this poem... i know u have a religion or sumthin now!!!lol but that was jus....W0ow!!! I luvd it and u should really keep writting!
---- Kelly

Wow, that had some great description and a lot of emotion to it! The only thing I would say is that the lines are all over a bit, lacking a kind of pattern, so if you wanted to work on that a bit, and if not it is still a good poem.

-Mikochan

Hey Timothy, i love the poem, it had a great feeling to it. Well done m8!

Linds x