My heart to yours

by mechelle skillin   Dec 2, 2005


You are everything to me
why can't you see
i need you more than life itself
please come back to me
i can't live my life with out you
i cry everynight sent you be gone
please hear my cry, come back into
my life, i know i made a mistake
but please give me one more try
it your choice now

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  • 18 years ago

    by Synh

    It was good but some of your words didnt make sense. Like, shouldn't 'sent' be 'since' and 'it' be 'it's'? Other than that, pretty good. 4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Meggie33

    Im ahh totally speechless... short, sweet, yet breath-taking at the same time.. amazing job... keep writing you have talent.. read sum of mine and let me know wut u think of them..

    **meggie**

  • 18 years ago

    by Nate

    Its a good poem. It touches the heart. Good job, Mechelle.

  • 18 years ago

    by Sondos

    I thought that this was good although i want you to work on a little something for me: although your rhyme schemes make it very easy for anybody to read and relate, maybe you could make them a bit more complex and constructive-this is my only constructive critiscim. Despite that i liked the raw emotion that came out and thought it was a well structured piece. Good Work

    Sondos

  • 18 years ago

    by mechelle skillin

    Thanks for you voice