Very interesting... I think that you need to express more feeling in your poems by writing more... and putting the feelings you write down in more detail... very good though for a first poem!!! very good.. If you need help check my poems out or other peoples writings.

Much luv,
Josh

Aww this ones sad to i really like it as well I did 5/5 :D lol keep up the good work sweets

~Mallory

Aww how sweet..stop writing about me loljk

It was good .

Hey gorjuz, I get the feeling of being stunned and numb when I read this. This I can relate to since suffering from depression. Anyway, as I have said many times before- keep up the great work! =) xxx

Well its a good poem i liek it alot!

I love it!! my first poem sux (walk part one) and this TOTALLY blows mine out the water!!

Pretty good...considering it's the first poem...very good...

Pretty Awesome!!!!!!!!! keep up the good work.