Comments : Mascara Bleeds

  • 18 years ago

    by Prophecies In Kodak

    This poem..was one I felt I had to finish ready right after the first few lines. Very well written. Deserves nothing other then a 5/5.

  • 18 years ago

    by pain is me

    I wanted more
    good job
    xxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by VYXSIN

    Hey
    this is a really kool poem, different to what i thought it would be but i really really liked it, your really talented.

    sara

  • 18 years ago

    by Michelle

    I love it! I wish I wrote this well. 5/5!

  • 18 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Fantasitc. I like this poem. You made the reader feel the emotions very well and the flow of this poem was perfect, no flaws what so ever. You're a very talented writer! :) Keep it up!

    Stephanie

  • 18 years ago

    by ellewen

    This one along with the soldure poems are my absolute favorites! What I like most about your poems are the meanings. They realllly get to me. I chose this one because of the title, because I like things that are origonal and out of the ordinary, so it caught my attention. I am now a huge fan and admirer of your work. JUst thought I should let you know! And any time you need a comment feel free to comment mine and I will be sure to comment back. Thanks
    ~skittles

  • 17 years ago

    by ŘÅÇĦ♥

    Your poem is awesome!!!! iT is soo true.! I love the ryhming. I love the title and the flow was absolutly amazing! Keep it up!!! 5/5 Rachel

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni

    Wow. this is very powerful. when I read this I felt like I was at an AFI concert for some reason. it just sounds like something they would sing, I guess. Wonderfully written and your chorus was awesome. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    Nice...some vivid imagery...nice flow...overall it was a good piece. The beginning line was a great hook. This piece kept attention throughout and remained cool til the end. Excellent. Each line was well done and each were able to complement each other. Awesome write and the last line was too cool.
    ~Faith-less

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Oh wow...
    I absolutely loved this.
    I thought it was very well written, and I loved the rhyme scheme, flow and wording.
    I thought the repitition used was excellent.
    One of my favourite poems.
    Well done.

  • 17 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    The ruthem was smooth and even through out the poem. it was well written and so many poeple could relate.

  • 17 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    OHMY. I cannot even say anything bad about this piece. It is SO good. Oh wow.. good work.. lovely.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    This is really good. I like the repetition of the second stanza. It seemed to give the poem an even sadder effect to it. I really like the topic that you chose. You described everything so well in this. And I could definitely relate to it. Great job on this! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Curry

    Wow this poem is amazing. i love it. i gave it a 5!

  • 17 years ago

    by amoxi

    Another great poem i liked the way you re-used a verse
    And they sing about hurt
    And they sing about pain
    They tell us what they do
    To hide all the shame
    And the tears start flowing
    As the music starts to feed
    And the face gets sadder
    And the mascara starts to bleed
    it really added to the poem, it was very good you're a great writer 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    About a rock concert Im guessing? Great flow, great poem!

  • 17 years ago

    by Poetess Lana

    Excellent write.

    I like how you used
    "And they sing about hurt
    And they sing about pain
    They tell us what they do
    To hide all the shame
    And the tears start flowing
    As the music starts to feed
    And the face gets sadder
    And the mascara starts to bleed"

    every other stanza, it made it really interesting to read. another 5/5

    Allanah

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Wow I love your poem! I like these 3 lines :) I enjoyed your work! 5/5! btw thanks for the comment.

    * I like the way you repeat these 3 lines*

    As the music starts to feed
    And the face gets sadder
    And the mascara starts to bleed

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow this was so intreguing(sp?) I really loved the repeated stanza it was beautiful and wonderfuly placed especially considering the length of it.. Nothing sounded forced in this and thats one major downfall of long poems like this one. such a wonderful topic.. yet again very different and very interesting. nice job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Anthony

    WOW! I really love this one! the seconed to last stanza is, for me, the best part! It also has a lyrical quailty. really great! 5/5!