by libby Dec 4, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
Stepping out of the van and the morning |
by Melissa
I love your style! What a great idea for a poem! Another excellent write! |
by Martyna
I think this has to be one of my favorites. I really love the style you chose. I also really like the way you described what each mile might have contained. Bang up job, Lib. |
by N J Thornton
Very impressive, I'd love to see more poetry written this well on here. As I read the first couple of lines I was honestly wondering where you were going with this poem, but as I read more it became clear. I really appreciate the background information at the bottom because I haven't heard of this incident, is it was helpful. I liked the simple tone it is written in, however, some of the simple terms hinder the strength of this terrible event. Such as when you described the "smell" maybe a more powerful word could be used than "smell," it just seems too general. The part starting with "one mile" was very clever and my favourite bit of the poem overall. |