It rhymes well and conveys a feeling of being completely lost in endless nothing and pain but maybe wishing you felt more lost so you couldn’t feel the pain. Blah...that’s what I got from it anyway. It shows how repetition torments you and yet you have managed to compress it without making it seem like it isn’t a big deal. I like your work. X

Awww.. that is so sad.. this was a very emotional poem! it had a good flow and used good descriptions! nice write! 4/5

That, agreed, is great. like ya profile, my mum read this and liked it, she one the weekly contest, please also check hers out.