by Samantha Dec 5, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
This is the story about an old woman. She is sitting alone at home by the fire. She has just stumbled upon a box of her old diaries and is looking at the covers... Slowly she begins to read of the days when she was in love... |
Wowa this is awsome i love how you set it out as a story!! 5/5 |
OMG!!!! i cant even explain how much of the same exact things happened to me and how i feel wow! its a great poem i really enjoyed it! :) |
Ooo im curious.....5/5 on this part! |
by Syn
I have a little constructive critisism for you . perhaps maybe when in the beginnig when your write as if your writing to your diary maybe when in the second stanza when you start saying you... perhaps you should change it to "he" ... just a thought..... to keep it the same and all. |
Hey! Wow, i really like this!! Im excited to read the next ones!! you're really good.. and liek the other person said, i liek how you made it kind of into a story! Nice job! |