Ah i love it!!
truly inspiring. Im not sure how u wrote such an account unless it happened to u because there's so much emotion in these and it seems liek u wrote them with ease.
Great work hun xoox

Overall, this is quite a good piece. I had to read all of them to understand it, I liked how your rhymes aren't forced - which is impressive as it is such a long story! From a writers POV I'd also congratulate (sp) you on the same tone throughout, but for the actuall storytelling parts at the beginning and end I'd recommend toning the emotion down a bit because it's already there and effective enough in the poems.