Hello Lyla,
first comment and first vote,
YEAAAAAAAAAHHHH...
good job

Hey Lyla :)

That was great! Seriously, I dont know why more people havent voted on it. It was really really good. Well done :)

Take care,
Rachelxx

Thanks again for commenting on my poem. It means alot. :)

Bad ending, in my opinion.. The rest of your poem was so poignant and effective, I hate to read such a common and cliche ending of suicide. Surely with the quality and emoption of the rest of the poem you can wrap it up more originally and poetic..

A young girl got yelled at all the time

'Got' should be changed to 'was.' Even in the preceding stanza do you use 'was,' which is the correct usage.. Anyway.. good poem, a lot of emotion in it. keep it up =O) 5/5

Great job, I'd like it better if you changed each last line so it's not repetitive.

Kind of a sad poem. I like it, its really good. Keep writing.

Wow .. I absolutely loved this poem excellent job 5/5 .. Oh and thanks for commenting and rating mine..

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*