I think your doing great so far....I will get back to you later on title sugestions . 5/5

Well if i suggest u the title then u hv to put half of the votes which this poem will get in my bank....i m sure with this start that even half will make me reach the top.. :o)

well great start dear...regarding the title..i think i'll wait as the continuity has to be seen within the stanzas and also the theme.. till then
all the best and take care