that's a well written poem... strong and deep. i gave it a 5. hope you could check out my poems too. take care:)
*Victoria* (with stars-*)

Hey, Chris!!! Thanks for that too! Nobody did that to me before so that was really special. Happy to know that I could help! Take care:)

You are a good writer. The message is good and the narration was good. In a competition there must have been a poem with Rhymes, rhythm, good narration with good message. OR may be a specific style of poetry. Your poem had good rhymes but it had no specific meter. In a competition perspective... may be thats why you lost. But it is a very good poem. Try out some specific style of poetry.. You are talented, you can do much more.