She Took My Money!

by Emilia   Dec 9, 2005


(In a prov of a man)

I didn't know it would happen to me
But last year it really did
I even gave you my Key
I was acting like a kid

Do you remember what I wrote to you in the sand
That you mean more than the world to me
That was the only time I held your hand
Down by the water by the sea

I gave you all my money
Because you wanted it all
But thats alright honey
Even if that was something you never did recall

We were together almost a year
Last year you left me with a note
Because I wasn't here
I just wanted your money you wrote

I think I understand now
Because you didn't have job
Shit, I'm so slow
You needed someone to rob

I went down to the city police
Where I find out I've been blown by my niece
A very young girl called Denise
So I'm sitting here waiting for my release

Denise was under age they said
So now I'm sitting here where she should be instead
But this is the end of my long story
I got out so you don't have to worry

Some friends of mine paid the bail
They bribe the police so I wouln't have to go to jail
But this is the end of my long story
I got out so you don't have to worry.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Jorge

    It has been a while sorry for dissaperaing just been busy with college well i liked ur poem a lot keep it up and btw check my new addition WUV U bye bye

  • 18 years ago

    by Luke

    I love it, all your stuff is so witty and clever. keep it up!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Brigitte

    Lol nice poem the title grabbed my eye right away and i loved your poem! Aside from a few miss spelled words (lol which i know we all have) I only have two things that you might want to fix!

    I gave you all my money
    Because you wanted them all
    ^^^ You might want to change that to "Because you wanted IT all"

    and...

    Some friends of mine paid the bill
    they bibe the police so i don't have to go to jail
    ^^^ this is correctly written but you changed tences in the middle of your poem... You were going all past untill the end so you might want to say " They bribed the police so i wouldn't have to go to jail"

    Other than that! You did a awesome job on your poem :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Gretchen

    The first line should be i didnt know it would happen to me instead of happened.
    First line of the 5th stanza should be now instead of know. Next line because you didnt have a job not had a job.
    Until the last 2 stanzas you had the abab format and then the last two you did aabb.
    Other than that the poem was pretty good the story was good.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jorge

    Not bad emilia not bad HEY how have u been its been a while since ive heard from u holla back ok?

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