This is funny . Besides a few misspelled words, it's great....keep up the good work..5/5

There was a little bit of a mix up, and at the end it was much more bitter than sweet.
Apart from that, quite thoughtful.

Good Writing!
beth

Hey cute poem. Some of the rhyme seems forced but other then that its good.
~~Sweetie

Not bad emilia not bad HEY how have u been its been a while since ive heard from u holla back ok?

The first line should be i didnt know it would happen to me instead of happened.
First line of the 5th stanza should be now instead of know. Next line because you didnt have a job not had a job.
Until the last 2 stanzas you had the abab format and then the last two you did aabb.
Other than that the poem was pretty good the story was good.

Lol nice poem the title grabbed my eye right away and i loved your poem! Aside from a few miss spelled words (lol which i know we all have) I only have two things that you might want to fix!

I gave you all my money
Because you wanted them all
^^^ You might want to change that to "Because you wanted IT all"

and...

Some friends of mine paid the bill
they bibe the police so i don't have to go to jail
^^^ this is correctly written but you changed tences in the middle of your poem... You were going all past untill the end so you might want to say " They bribed the police so i wouldn't have to go to jail"

Other than that! You did a awesome job on your poem :)

I love it, all your stuff is so witty and clever. keep it up!!

It has been a while sorry for dissaperaing just been busy with college well i liked ur poem a lot keep it up and btw check my new addition WUV U bye bye