Hey Corey that was so sad! I hope taht hasnt rly happned 2 u!if so im sry.Ill give it a 5/5

luves,
luves4eva

Corey I'm so sorry about everything
Its so good that you put your feelings into your writing. I

Thats really good
i like it
its kool
good job
i will giveu a
5/5

Wow, That is really sad and powerrful Corey. I love it, i mean not the fact it happened to you but your writing!!

Thought your rhyme was REALLY good and the poem over all was excellent its like everything just fit together and flowed.. nice one

This is so sad remember hun i luff u it made me cry! im sorry! love ya!
Raychel

Awsome.....so deep

. . . . . the funny thing is, you and me are alike in many ways. Although my mother was not abusive, my stepfather was, and his girlfriend, who he was having an affair with, tried to suffocate me.... I know EXACTLY how you feel. ^_~ keep up ur poem writing, ur very good at it.

^Half assed comments, you have to hate them!

Anyways, that was alot better then the poem I read before. It had emotion, and depth. I like how yo uexplained that whole story to us. I can't wait to read it when you are done! Advice: check the spellings of your words, and put a little more flow to it. Nice job so far Corey!

-Jennifer.

Overall Rating: Undecided.
(Its not finished.)