Wow, that was really good!

Gud job with the poem.. i especially like the last four lines.. u used words that described a very solemn mood.. gr8 work
keep it up
thnx 4 the comment, much appreciated
NannO

This poem is really good i really like it like i dunno i like how you used icy alot its really how a lot of stuff feels,

lots of love
*~*Becky*~*

Interesting poem and different. i liked it it was very captivating!

Wow your poem was so beautiful
i think moon and ice are two of the prityist things the earth has to offer loved the description and im sorry but i carnt see that poem been real about you i can see it but... it carnt be felt its stil beautiful though and its still a 5/5

A very sad poem, but has beautiful imagery. Well done, a very good write.

It must have been hard to deal with all of this..and who was jake to u if i may ask? probably someone really close to u...well one of my friends took their life too and it hurt me in wayz i never thought it would...when she did it it probably didnt hurt her but it really hurt the people around...especially me...well ur poems are unique and i love to read them...5/5

Great poem, your a talented writer. thanks for commenting on my poem.
~bianca~

Suicide is one of the saddest things, even to those who have tried themselves and seen others whom have done it. It hurts to feel the guilt we could of helped it hurts that someone else suffered so much they did that, but someone around the world suicides every 40 seconds. A good poem. One line to fix is "to steel away his sole", i think you meant "to steal away his soul". Keep writing, its a great form of communication from your soul and makes life a little less painful.
luv Broken.

Amazing job and i'm so sorry about Jake. I really wished everyone would think about what they do before they do it. I mean it's pretty scary knowing everyone like brokenmisery said that around the world which is about 18 seconds or whatever take there lives. I mean i was one of those people thinking about it. But i realized it was stupid i mean my mom helped me out a little bit but she didn't know i was cutting and one night she told me she loved me and i almost started crying because she never said that before i mean yeah when i was a little kid but not now and i realized it was stupid and now i have my down time thinking of cutting but i don't do it because it's stupid and i'm actually happy about life now but this poem i really hope makes people think that one person can go and look what happens and maybe they can re think it over before they do anything stupid again. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

Wow that was great. I think I liked the first two lines the best out of the poem though. You have a lot of talent so keep up the good work. *5/5*

Not your best, but good none the less....
i sure wish i could go where he is *sigh*

Once agian I would get rid of the comas and periods. I dont see much use for them. Other than that I really liked reading. You poems are all well put together.