Hey this is really good but some advice not nameing poems is like not naming your kids no one pays attention to ppl w/o names and this could use better structcher just put sum spaces at the end of some lines or thoughts and about the name thing just pick you fav. line but dont get me wrong its really good

I did like your poem. I just did not like they way that it was set up. I think that it kind of ruined the flow of the whole thing. But other wise it was good.