Cause for a short while he was seen as the patient man with the helping hand

THe only thing I just want to suggest if I may, is that maybe you should add a few more words in that last line...THe poem was well structured and very well written until that part..I think this poem will be nicely peiced if you said something along the lines of "Cause for a while he was seen as a patient man, always with a generous helping hand"...might flow a little better...don't have to use it just some critiquing...Other then that I really enjoyed this peice..I don't normally read dark poems but I have to say I enjoyed reading this one!!

Thanks so much for your comment on my poem "Magic in the Mistletoe"....It was so nice of you and made me smile...me and Britt have made a new account...ChelsandBritt.....tonight we will be adding more poems if your interested in reading! Thanks again we appreciate it!

Kind Regards,
~Chelsey~

Oh yes I do enjoy this poem better and think it reads a little more easier! Great job!