Great poem. i like it a lot.

1 thing though, it might be better if the first 2 stanzas didnt have the same last line

Breath taking. Very beautiful. So beautiful writin. Very good. I truly loved it, you are very talented, keep writin =) lotsaa love -xxx-

The first two stanzas have the same last line for a reason.. i didn't just put it in there cause i didnt know what else to put.

Wow this poem left me speechless..i have to say that this is an amazing poem and i feel the esact same way...somehow i feel that u r still stuck in ur past...she dumped u...and everybody around u is tellin u to forget it and to move on with ur life when u truly cant...even thoe u tried u just can't ...i know how u feel...i'm in that position...and i have to say that u r one of the most wonderful GUY writers out there...keep up the great work...if u ever need me ...i'm here 4 u...
love always
PrEcIoSA

Thank you PrEcIoSA... lets keep in touch. and yes.. its like you know exactly how i feel..

This poem has so much feeling in it.
You kept the flow going until the end which makes it even better.
5/5

Thank you.

Wow that was so touching!! Beautifuly writen.. great job 5/5
-luv courtie

Wow..... im speechless.... you're truly talented. keep it up!
-xXx-

It has a great start. I definitely like the first stanza. The last line in the second stanza if it was my poem id have a different line and not the same that was in the last but thats just me. Maybe cut a few lines shorter in the last few stanzas, but otherwise its got alot of potential and you have a very unique style.

Wow omg that poem is reallly good wow well keep it up

This is a really great poem, lots of emotion. You seem really poeticly talented. There arn't a whole lotta guys that are, keep it up.

Thank you..

Wow this poem is amazing, god i think there should be millions more guys who can write poetry as well as you can, lol thats all i want ina man haha, btu no really though this poem is truly beautiful it is so captivating even though its not long like it held you in, once i got to the end i almost asked out loud for there to be more because it was just so good

lot of love
*~*Becky*~*

This is a very good poem, although capitalizing every first letter really chops up the flow. However, it isn't too big of a deal...regardless...I enjoyed the poem. Subtley simple.

Lucy Loves Not

Good job, it is different though. Creative subject. Keep it up

After much consideration. i changed a line...

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. 5/5 forsure.

Tiffany.xox.

I see that you already have some praise from people, and I'm gonna tell you this - that is all for a reason. This poem is great, I've read some of your poems a while back and fell in love with them all, and I've just done it all over again. There's nothing I wouuld change about this and nothing could make it better than it is. Beautiful job David. I wish you strength and love, and all the best.

GREAT POEM I FEEL THE SAME WAY!!!!