You and Me

Hooray a love poem! LOL
Have to say I agree with all the grammatical stuff from Gizmo. It would make a good poem great.
Still liked it though it was so innocent and sweet.
WE WANT MORE LOL

The part when you said:

"And never let me leave
This is like a fairy tale
In the rain we are
Just you and me"

I loved that part... great job...and great job on ending your poem with the title!!!

This is a good poem, but you've made a few gramatical errors. When you write, you're talking to someone.either the person you're writing the poem about, or, to others, telling them about someone. in this poem, you've done both.>>>"Just like in the movies
We are standing out in the rain
He leans in to kiss me
I know after this
We will never feel the same
This kiss could lead to anything
Us falling in love
Or even us falling apart" Here...its like you're talking to me...telling me about this guy, and here...>>>"Is you are forever in my heart
We continue to see each other
At least 3 times a week
Each date gets better and better
I think we both know that it is
Love that we both seek" You're talking to him, telling him how you feel. so, it'll make the poem a million times better, if you decided who you're talking to, us or him...another thing...alot of peole use "that"..just because they can...but most of the time, "that" isn't needed. Just like in this line >>> "I think we both know that it is
Love that we both seek" You're poem would sound...alot better if you took out the "that" in this line - Love that we both seek - for verious reasons...so i thought those were some ways that i could help you with this poem. :) neways, it WAS beautiful, and did express alot of emotion.

Absoultly loved it! you did a wonderful job with this and i am very impressed! good job and keep up the good work!

sammie

Aww, sweet. So nice, great wording.
Tara xxxx