PAranOiA...!

by ~*×FaÐ3D‡‡M€mØ®Ïê§×*~   Dec 11, 2005


There is a voice,
a voice within,
a voice just beneath,
the surface of my skin,

its like another person,
takin over inside,
the only person in which,
i really can confide,

the only person in which,
i can really talk to,
who wont tell anyone,
when i decide to f u c k i n kill u,

it knows the pain,
you all put me in,
it told me to build up,
all the anger within,

it thinks its about time,
that yous all do pay,
for all the cruel things,
you do and say,

he thinks you should die,
for everything you\'ve done,
its got me ready to shoot you,
with this glamorous gun,

its tellin me now,
im ready to kill,
we shoot you in the head,
and watch your blood spill,

now that your dead,
nobody will mess with me,
coz this voice in my head,
brings out the best in me!!!

** this is crazy, but i guess im in a really bad mood.... plz plz plz vote/comment, ill return the favour

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  • 18 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I liked this.
    It has a lot of spelling errors that need to be fixed.
    But I enjoyed the imageryy, wording and flow.
    I also liked the way you ended it.

  • 18 years ago

    by Letty

    This is a good poem, but I don't think that it's one of your best. It has a lot of grammer and spelling error's that you should edit and it really didn't hold my attention much because the flow wasn't as good as the other ones. This poem actually seems rushed and I am not going to rate it because I didn't really get. Keep writing.

    Best wishes
    Letty

  • 18 years ago

    by Infected with His Deadly Love

    Hey another gr8 poem!! And thnx for the comment on my poem, I no I am bit late in doing urs, sorry!! But I love ur poems!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Rhonda

    I guess i'm crazy b/c this is exactly how i feel but dont tell nobody ;)

    n-e-ways great poem 5/5!

  • 19 years ago

    by Void

    Hey! I came to read this poem mostly because it got your lowest rating and I thought I'd check it out. Frankly, I don't understand why you only got a 4, i gave you a 5/5, for the reasons that you have good rhythm, nice rhyme scheme with great flow, and well, you got your point across ( no matter how crazy :P)... My only thought of why you might have gotten only 4 was maybe the swear word (?) lol I really don't know, but I do know that some people either take that offensively or simply believe that swearing shows weakness. I, however, think it caught your moment.. so umm, yeah i guess I'm contradicting myself a bit... lol my bad, anyway the point was to say that it's really good, great job!

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