Better than that best friends poem, but u really need to stop working last minute...it might work for me, but it evidently doesnt work for u

Wow harsh. Simply put (in a much nicer way) I realize from darkened's ever so harsh comment that you make your poems out of the top of your head. A lot of people can do this , but a lot can't. Basically just sit down and think hard about what your writing. You will improve your writing greatly. Anyways this poem is better than the last. A sign of improval.

And,Oh yes, I forgot to say: last minute poetry works for me, but, I can get a much better result from thinking everything through

Glad you see my point zephy...i know my comments are harsh, but hey, its critique, i give genuine comments

Glad you see my point zephy...i know my comments are harsh, but hey, its critique, i give genuine comments

I agree with ZephyCloud, I have read almost all your poems and they seem to be getting better each time, but also, the length is shortenng and that is horrible because the poems are becoming better.