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Only problem I have is Lossed should be lost ( trust me, it will still rhyme with tossed lol)
Other than that thoruoughly ejoyed it.

With all respect it is a bit rocky, but it has potential and it's already pretty good...Keep it up.

xDarkSuicidex

Aww it's really sad! And I really can relate to it! Very good job!

Anoter very well written poem. I ask you to find bob shanks though, and read his poem "You don't understand" because think it will open your eyes a tad.

This was an amazing poem, and i totally know how you feel. i feel like this all the time...i have one comment that will help your readers understand ur rhythem better...it'll make the flow easier..

In poetry, there are things called pauses, or breaks. Most of the time, they're natural, when you read something, you pause. But most of the time, they happen when someone starts a new line, or they put punctuation at the end of a line.

I think that if you start a new line, when you put in a punctuation mark, it'll help the reader understand where your pauses are...like this!

Look at my past, It's kind of scary
Look if you dare

that would be like this

Look at my past,
It's kind of scary
Look if you dare