Hang on

by Jackie Marie   Dec 13, 2005


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You just want to give up
For everything that was ever said
Everything that has happened
Has gone straight to your head

Now everythings different
Can no longer be you
You just sit there and wonder
"What did I ever do?"

Nobody understands
Why you feel this way
They don't understand
Anything that you have to say

And no one understands
Why you sit all alone
But you don't want all this pain
Don't slip through and be shown

So you keep all to yourself
Just trying to live another day
Hoping for a day of happiness
Or for someone to say,

"Everything will be alright"
"Just hang on for a little longer"
"Everthing will get better"
"Just try to be a little stronger"

She sits there with little hope
And for the first time she prays,
"God, if you are listening,
Please bring better days."

*The ending sounds a little..wierd..But please comment so I know! Thanks for reading!*

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  • 18 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    She sits there with little hope
    And for the first time she prays,
    "God, if you are listening,
    Please bring better days."

    Nothing weird about these lines. For me they are the perfect ending.

  • 18 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    The endings not weird!

    "Everything will be alright"
    "Just hang on for a little longer"
    "Everthing will get better"
    "Just try to be a little stronger"

    i wish people would tell me that every once in a while! but most people don't know when i'm depressed, so how could they? great poem, i loved it. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by BleedingAngel

    No that was a great ending, such a sad and beautiful poem, written with such feelings and emotions, I really feel your frustrations in this one and I relate to it!!! Keep up the good work...

    Love Sabrina

  • 18 years ago

    by ~*×FaÐ3D‡‡M€mØ®Ïê§×*~

    Hey this poem is wicked, its unique/diffrnt... nut i liked they way you wrote it!!! its awesome... keep up the work xoxo

  • 18 years ago

    by Amy

    Hey i luv this! the sense of "i cant show my real self, put on my fake smile and it'll b alright" is excellent. i can relate to it heaps as i went thru something exactly like that. i really like ur writing and i would consider getting some of it plublished or entering it into compitions because u truely are a great writer
    luv amy

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