Hey i luv this! the sense of "i cant show my real self, put on my fake smile and it'll b alright" is excellent. i can relate to it heaps as i went thru something exactly like that. i really like ur writing and i would consider getting some of it plublished or entering it into compitions because u truely are a great writer
luv amy

Hey this poem is wicked, its unique/diffrnt... nut i liked they way you wrote it!!! its awesome... keep up the work xoxo

No that was a great ending, such a sad and beautiful poem, written with such feelings and emotions, I really feel your frustrations in this one and I relate to it!!! Keep up the good work...

Love Sabrina

The endings not weird!

"Everything will be alright"
"Just hang on for a little longer"
"Everthing will get better"
"Just try to be a little stronger"

i wish people would tell me that every once in a while! but most people don't know when i'm depressed, so how could they? great poem, i loved it. 5/5

She sits there with little hope
And for the first time she prays,
"God, if you are listening,
Please bring better days."

Nothing weird about these lines. For me they are the perfect ending.