by Tessa Dec 14, 2005
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Life, society /
other
It's just a ball of dust |
by N J Thornton
A powerful write. I liked the way you described the earth and the whole of existance really. I think the repetition in the fourth stanza worked well, it wasn't too much and it gave the desperate needy feeling of wanting to fly away. On the very last line of the final stanza you have a typo, I think you meant "beneath." |
Beautiful... just... beautiful. I am at a loss for words, gracious one. Please continue with your work; you do have the talent. |