An interesting story. You may want to look at your speech marks again because some are in weird position or only being one. I'm interested also as to why the darkness was behind the dream, was it that nothing I reality or dreams is perfect, I felt that was left empty and unexplained however that in itself gives a whole new view on the story I when you think over it. Well it’s certainly left in my mind. Good work.

Very interesting.. could have been much better but it tended to be a little unfocused. I like the concept though.

Wow very well told may need a little work but i always feel you go with your first instinct no matter the outcome i never change the way it is

I am just wondering something,
How do you write so well?
Aside from when you copy and paste and they replace the: ' with a itâ??. Yeah, and I could understand most of the poem but some was a little off topic I think, and I did not understand it.