Good work. I like how you positioned yourself as a 'plant' because it gave a more in-depth and meaningful expression of your feelings. You have a good meter which helped the flow of the poem even though it wasn't in traditional structure (abab or aabb). I also have to thank you for using punctuation which is rarely used on this site. I enjoy your work it has original twists than most poetry on here and you're a very experienced writer and I look up to that. Congratulations on a great piece!

[ps. thank-you for your comment (",) it means a lot to me to get a real comment]

Hi Letty, thanks for the great reviews. This is an excellent example of going out of the "standard mold" of poems. The only thing i would recommend is letting more passion show... it seems in your poems you hold back.. let go and don't be afraid of what someone will think.

I loved it i do agree with kelly about holing back but if thaats your style don't stop it doesn't hold back your poem

I agree with broken misery, but I also argee a little with what Kelly said because you should be trying to express more feelings but then I agree with Tim, don't ruin your poems.

This was hot good job 5/5

Good work, nice use of rhyming, it made it flow very well, I liked the emotion in this poem