You Don't Care

by nobody truly knows me   Dec 17, 2005


*I know that this isn't my best poem. Could you please tell me what you think or any advice on how to make it better?*

I am mad
I am sad
I am angry
I am happy
I am scared
you don't care
I want to hide
I want to stay inside
I want to cry
I want to be able to fly
I want to go away
I need a break from what you say
You say I'm lazy
You say I'm being crazy
You say I'm ungrateful
You say I'm being hateful
You say I'm stressful
What you say is hurtful
You don't see how I feel
You don't know the deal
You don't see my tears
You don't know my fears
You don't see me cry
You never see how hard I try
I try to make you happy
I try to stay away when you're angry
I try to solve the problems I go through
I try to do what you tell me to do
I try to forget the hurtful things you say
I'm tired of trying so hard everyday
I need you to understand me
I need to be who I want to be
I need to live my own life
I need you to stop causing strife
I need you to stop yelling
I want you to be caring and loving

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  • 18 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    This is amazing u really got the talet for sure

  • 18 years ago

    by ŘÅÇĦ♥

    Wow- that's amazing it started off kind of weird. but I like the repeating of the same word. v.good keep writing!

    -Rachel

  • 18 years ago

    by Tammie

    I like the fact that although it is very repetitive, it's not noticable. We all have these emotions inside us and some that unanswerable. I love the reality of this poem. Great job. Keep it up. =]

  • 18 years ago

    by Lady Vengeance

    Hmmm well i don't know how u could make it ebtter, but i quite liked it really. very nicely done.

    teh structure and simplicity gives a little more power to the words.

  • 18 years ago

    by ~*~Morgan~*~

    Aww thats a sad poem keep up the good work we are all here if u need us

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