This seems like something i want to say to my family, i like the repetitve words its very good keep it up

lots of love
*~*Becky*~*

Aww thats a sad poem keep up the good work we are all here if u need us

Hmmm well i don't know how u could make it ebtter, but i quite liked it really. very nicely done.

teh structure and simplicity gives a little more power to the words.

I like the fact that although it is very repetitive, it's not noticable. We all have these emotions inside us and some that unanswerable. I love the reality of this poem. Great job. Keep it up. =]

Wow- that's amazing it started off kind of weird. but I like the repeating of the same word. v.good keep writing!

-Rachel

This is amazing u really got the talet for sure