by The heart the soul the love Dec 17, 2005
category :
Friendship, family /
other
No one can ever know what's on your mind |
Some of the rhymes sem a little forced, but other than that a billiant peice |
I like this one to! |
VERY GOOD!!! i love all of your poems and if you keep writing i will keep writing |
I like this one, but I think you focused too hard on rhyming that some lines lost their touch, but i like the overall poem, cute, but not overly. |
This was good. I liked your rhyme scheme. Words like hope and soap and up and cup. |