This was good. I liked your rhyme scheme. Words like hope and soap and up and cup.

I like this one, but I think you focused too hard on rhyming that some lines lost their touch, but i like the overall poem, cute, but not overly.

VERY GOOD!!! i love all of your poems and if you keep writing i will keep writing
Love Always, Tiffany Heather

I like this one to!

Some of the rhymes sem a little forced, but other than that a billiant peice