by sarahAnn
Aaron i still love you and that was a greta poem |
by sarahAnn
Great** |
Ends ver incompleat..there is so much more to tell, you get the reader going and then "," your done...nice. I did injoying being forced to think. But because of this I have no idea what you are trying to say... You do have great word choice, and beutiful images, maybe work on linking each image, better. But I dont have much critisism to offer. |
by libby
I like it, especially the imagery in the first stanza bit. |
by RachelAnne
Its kind of strange you cant really see much of a rhythmic balance but its like you can see what youre writing about come to life.. thats so cool i would like to see more poems like this! |
by RachelAnne
Btw 5/5 |
Greasttt job..please try and get sum peeps top read my stufft thnxs. |
by sarahAnn
Aaron baby....I love you. |
You seem to have mastered the art of emotional imagery ....great poem |
by Bridgette
I really like this. You were very descriptive in this and it's very well written. I really like the way that you ended it.. You did a great job on this. |
by Darien
Awesome poem.. only 1 suggestion I can make.. first line, replace 'dripping' with something else, because you mention the word 'drip' in the 2nd line, and that made it a bit weak. Still awesome stuff man. 5/5 |
by firexflys
Very nice diffrent i like that keep up teh great work 5.5 |
Outstanding imagery metaphors |
by Natalie
Oooh! This was cool ^_^ Tehe. You really captured the imagry. And even though it was short, It was really good. Keep it up! 5/5 |
by Jessica
Wow!! that was amazingg.. i loved that, i had such a strong picture of that in my mind.. i really enjoyed reading that, and i couldn't tear my eyes away.. it used great imagery and descriptions, flowed well, and was just perfect! 5/5! xox |
by Lovely Bones
This is a stunning piece of work. I love it! As an artist myself, I can definately relate to this poem and how you feel in it. I love the imagery, and the flow that you created. I love the diction and basically just everything of how you put it together! Great job.. keep it up! |
by stargirl49
Gr8 job!!! keep up the awesome work!! |
by kelley
Wow |
by sanjia
Wow!! i like this!! i love art too so the way u wrote this is great!! |