This was a very beautiful poem. I see something in ur poem, that i see in alot of poems lately, that the flow is a little hard....and i thought, that i could give u a little advice that helps me keep my flow good..

When u read poetry, you come to a rest point, a break, or a puse, some are natural, in the way the writer reads the poem, and some times thats where they're put, based on the rhymer. But they're mostly always at punctuation. I believe, its easier to read a poem, where the pauses are put in by starting a new line, because the flow is easier, and the rhymer is visible, and understandable, and everything doesn't seem clumped together. So for example,

I'm slowly breaking down
With tears rolling down my face
Thinking of liars, cheaters
and then some memories
I wish I could erase

Its almost like u start a new line, with a new thought. I hope i explained what i was trying to say well enough so that i don't look retarted, lol but, like i said, it was just advice. you dont have to take my suggestion.

I did love ur poem...and i gave it 5/5 so i'm off to read another keep up the good work

Awww that was really cute. Very deep but I liked it. Great job and thanks for the comment!! 5/5

Wow this is amazing.. I can totally realte to this.. I understand how it feels to love somoene so much but to not want to say anything.. thats the most frustrating thing in the entire world, and sometimes playing it safe does work but then other times it just leaves you alone.. any way I give this one a five because it was excellent.. thanx a lot for your comment I really appreciate it.

Magnificent work, this poem has so much emotion and heart in it.

LOVE THE POEM!!! Your an amazing writer and I hope you go far with all your work someday!!!!!

Juls

Wow great poem i love it excellent job
love aLWAYS
tabby

I love the stories with the poems..amazing deeper imagery would make it batter love it thoughhhhh

LISSA