Hey g0od j0b 0n this!!

Really good....I liked it alot and what language is that? lol anyways I really hope u feel better or that this is just a poem and not forreal. Great job.

::MELI::

The language is ngata - Maori. I learnt it when I was 14..

Aww good job on this one!! Thanx for commenting on my poems. I've been through a lot just like you. I can relate to your work. 5/5 Keep writing!

Forever Wilting,
Black~Rose!

Wooow , you made my eyes teary cuz u reminded me of some , such a great poem from a great poet , keep up the great work n ill keep on cheaking ur poems 5/5

All ur poems r so strong of meaning i loved made my eyes tear... thanks for all ur comments and keep it up (the poems, the comments if u want lol)

I love you're poem its realy personal, and can aply to almost anyone

I think you should use 'ka kite' instead of'kiaora' as most people use it for greeting. I liked how you were able to show your emotions effectively without sounding exaggerated, its a fine line between the two. Your writing is also very controlled here, comes off nicely. Kia kaha e hoa :)