Very interesting way to put it, nice job.

I......like it. Its unique, it seems like one of those poems that you cant quite get right but if you tried to change it, it would screw it up. It reminds me of some of the poems i've tried to write. It has great themes and some lines are brilliant like 'sad- yes i know, your hearts cold like snow' it just fits so well. Great wind down conclusion.

-Lenny