Aww this is sad.. I really liked it tho... great write

Sadly this can happen to people. It's a really sick world. Good poem.

Nice poem and sad one at that.Very powerful too.I like how you put their punishment was temporary, while her's was eternal. once again nice poem 5/5

That is a sad poem. Was it a friend of yours? Personal poems are always very good. Full of emotions. I felt the pain, the anger and the sadness. Neat stuff.

Good poem the flow gets thrown off a few times but other then that its a good subject.
~~Sweetie

This poem is sooo sad and i feel all the emotion in it...and i hope this didn't happend to anybody close to you...it would be sooo sad...but its a amazing poem...5/5

It was a very awesome poem, although i found no rhythem to it. I also didn't feel to much emotion in it...but its a poem thats very uncommon, and very origional...i was confused wit this line

With internal bleeding
She is now dying with

This is a very sad poem. Im sorry this happened to your friend. I hope she feels better.

Oh my god!!!!! i'm so sorry for your friend!!!!! i can't even begin to imagine what i'd feel like if that happened to my friend. stay strong, my thoughts are with you!!!!
**lisa**

I hope your friend will make. Very nice job and touching poem

I am very sorry about your friend.
It is very cruel that people kill just because they decided to drink too much, then decided to hurry.
Life is awful sometimes.

Ogm this was perfect! i luvd this poem very much..there was so much emmotion and it really drew u into the poem! 5/5!!!

~*Who Cares?*~

This reminds me of one of the simple plan's MTV, can't remember the title though. It's a message to those drunkers who drives.

Anyway, this is a really sad poem, especially one written for a friend. It makes my skin crawls thinking of it. It's sad that there're such selfish people.

This poem also written a message to all of us, which is, to treasure life. Hope you're doing okay. =)

Nice poem,and my wishes that your friend will be fine again soon..

I truly pray that your friend makes it. I can only imagine the pain that you're going through. My grandmother went through this last year, although she had a stroke not a car accident, but I think I understand to some extent what you're going through. Great poem.

Sort of just a story and although i'm sure you feel many things on the topic but i saw little to none emotion in your words only "jerks" really made me connect to your emotions. rather than get angry and go big you chose a often forgotten word that (to me aleast) means alot more than the more common "badder" words.

you still sent the point across about the gravity of stupid peoples actions