Great poem, its very powerfully written

Hey, there's alot of feeling in this song. I really liked it. Some people think that you need imagery for a poem and song, but I think that if you can create enough emotion (as you did) then imagery just isn't always important. Do you have a melody and stuff for the song, or just lyrics? Anyway, Keep up the good writing! :)

Wow! Awesome song/poem! It has a lot of emotion and feeling to it! 5/5! Great Job! Keep it up! And thanx for the comments.=)
Brittney
aka **mysteriolover**

Wow! Awesome song/poem! It has a lot of emotion and feeling to it! 5/5! Great Job! Keep it up! And thanx for the comments.=)
Brittney
aka **mysteriolover**

Wow good poem...ur really talented..5/5....thanks for the comments
lisa

Empowering. 5/5. i really like it. =] yeeah ! thanks for the comment by the wayy. means alot with just a few words.

You did a very nice job working the rhyming and the way this song streams. It tells a very powerful message and i wouldn't be surprised to hear this on the radio all over someday. Keep up the good work!

Wow, that would make a killer song! And it makes an awesome lyrical poem to...which is what songs generally are. It has wonderful imagery and is just...beautiful, gripping, and an adventure in itself.

Dude this was really, really an awesome song so far! This is just one of the best so far it blew me away!!!
Do you play in a band or something?
Hopefully one day it will become a song for everyone to hear! great work
keep it up! ^_^

Good job i really liked this one...and btw, u ARE one of my favorites thank u very much! lol...so wut now dude? booyah! boo fricking yah!

love ya lots,
sore

Well detael:)