by Lenny Dec 22, 2005
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
Forgotten dreams, |
by Drew Gold
Nice take on your conscience,.. I really didnt think of that connection til the last line (a lil groggy) but it was a good poem, indeed.. so effortlessly do you create a rhythm and mold the words into it.. it's amazing how effortlessly you manage to do that.. Not once did the flow slip or falter.. It can apply to many things, but what especially draws me to this is that I firmly believe we must conquer ourselves, overcome our fears, etc, before we can really be content,.. I'm workin on that.. One qualm I kinda have (and may hold no merit) is that it seems your imagery is sparse,.. It was good and solid as usual, but not as lucid as some of your others, somehow.. good work, nonetheless,.. and sole = soul*... pZ out =O) |
Brillent. i loved it. well worded. very creative and intelligent. my favorite to stanzas were the first two...masterpieces. |
I love this poem! fantastic imagery and great flow. brilliant write!! very well done. |