This is sad, and i think a little background story on this would be useful, like how you ruined your chances or something like that, but this is really good your vocab and way of wording things is right on...5/5

I like it but some things you could change. Comment me back and ill help yah.I like it thou why were you chances ruined? Sounds sad.. i sorta went through something like that but i was on the other end of it all. my love ruined everything.So maybe i can help you with things.