This is very good, the last stanza isn't quite as good as the rest, but still a brilliant poem

Hey. I'm not sure why you only got 4 on that, but I'll go my best to raise it up a bit. Maybe it was that some of your poem had such good rhyme scheme to it and then all of a sudden it didn't flow so well... But the story behind it is really cool and you have good imagery, so I'd be happy to give you a 5/5. Keep it up!

This is a very unique poem. I must applaud you for your creativity. Nice job

---Sher

Nice vampire poem :) I think it would have been better if you added more rhymes, but the storyline is pretty nice 5/5
Keep it up! *hug*

P.S.: I have a few vampire poems too, if you'd like to read them. ("Chrysanthemums scent", "A place in Heaven for the Fallen" and "Red roses... raven feathers")