Very different topic from what I usually read. This poem really got me thinking. You did a good job writting it.

Aww wow this was a very heartfelt piece of work. It reminds me of so many people I know who have tried to commit suicide, or are currently looking for reasons to live. The ending was beautiful, a complete powerful blow in the face. Thank you for your comments on my poems. Keep up your excellent work! 5/5

I was very interested in this poem because of the title, but I was worrying it might be a suicide poem - I am so relieved to find this, and not just relieved, quite impressed.

"Even further than the ground,
To a pit of darkness so deep,
You will never climb out."

That reminded me of 'His Dark Materials' - and the fate of Lyra's parents - but I digress, sorry. It did leave me with quite a thought, to fall for eternity, never hitting the ground. Scary.

"This is my question.
How do you want to die?

And my answer is;
Not yet."

I absolutely adore that. Maybe because it's refreshing to read that someone wants to live, and not die, or maybe because it's just the perfect ending to your poem. Probably a bit of both.

I have no fault, no criticism, no negativity at all. Great piece, well done. x

I liked this poem. It was original. My favorite part of the poem was the very last 2 lines:

"And my answer is;
Not yet. "

Great way to end it. It was a lovely poem. The flow was pretty good and the message behind the words was amazing. Overall rating: 4/5. Good work. Keep writing!

~BJ~

Wow, love it. It was unquie I thought, I liked it very much though, specially how you ended it. The flow of it didn't get thrown off at all, and it kepy it's rythym through-out the whole thing.

I would give you a speech about how i loved this poem because i've been there and done that whole suicide thing... but it seems plenty of people have and probably will so i'll spare you the repetition... i liked this poem... it made me smile... alot as a matter of fact... alot more then the other one... but the other one was good also... your a great writer... don't give up...

kilman

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This one is really dark and very well written. You dont look your age but way matured to write such a poem. Keep it up!

I loved this poem well written your a great writer

I love ur writing i couldnt stop reading them