I like this, the story is told very well. the flow seemed to be lacking in some places, but only marginerly. all in all very good

Wow.. im suprised by the way it ended but great job it was very well written! very very strong wrods and the use of them to say a strong statement.. awesome poem keep it up =) once again very well written!

--emotionless19*

How sad, yet often too often this is reality for so many innocent children. So many parents are lost into their own addictions (liquor, drugs, sex, parties, etc...) to hear the cries of their own children. It is often said that we hurt the ones we love the most... go figure

---Sher

Ohhh wow, I am so speechless, this is sooo damn good...WOW WOW WOW...My fave part:

mommy, I'll draw you another picture.
I'll draw you killing daddy.
I'll draw you drinking up the Vodka.
mommy, don't put away the glass.
i want to play with it.
i want to draw a picture again

This really touched my heart and I hope that it isn't true?? Well if you EVER need some one to talk to I am here for you. God this is a sad poem...

Much Love Sabrina

I must say the poem read like a short mystery novel and I was almost afraid to read the rest. I loved the ending, and I don't think the butler did it this time. On the other hand you touched upon some serious issues that I would imagine conribute to teen suicide. great job